Love Will Always Continue Ch8 (original) (raw)

09:55 am - Love Will Always Continue Ch8

This started off a few months ago as an ordinary badfic retelling the script of the musical -- or, more likely, the movie -- in limping prose (Raoul: "I would like to talk you to dinner" [sic]).

For some reason I glanced at the latest update, and discovered a particularly ripe crop of malapropisms and some extremely bad titillation that was just too much to resist. I did resist leaving a review on the story giving my opinion of this masterwork, since it would clearly fall on utterly tonedeaf ears...

Love Will Always Continue (Chapter 8)

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11145784/8

Summary: This is the way I want Phantom of the Opera to happen. What if Christine and Erik had a secret relationship? What if Christine and Erik were lovers in secret? Will Raoul ever find out?

(Translation: the same plot as every other OOC teenage phanfic)

"Raoul stop your hurting me!" (Desist from your injuring of me!) Christine said as Raoul dragged her to the roof top. Christine screamed and clawed at his hand but he didn't let her go. (Because everyone knows that there is a mysterious character who kidnaps girls against their will in POTO, and it's... Raoul?) As Raoul dragged Christine to the roof top (did we mention that he dragged her to the roof top [sic]?) Madame Giry saw (through the intervening ten storeys of Opera House) that Raoul had taken Christine. She knew Erik would not like this. (Oh, the drama and tension!)

She waited in her office for him and before she could sit at her desk she saw Erik their (their what? Their bank-manager?) already. "Where's Christine?" She asked her but she had a worried look on her face. (Possibly because she was as confused as I was as to whom she was talking to) "Befriend could get her (I believe Erik already tried the befriending tactic -- it didn't work out too well :-p) Raoul took her." Erik's face grew with worry. (Soon it was so long that his chin touched the floor.) "Where did he take her?!" "It looked like he was taking her to the roof." The Erik left. ('Erik' is actually a title now? His Highness, the Erik of Phantom?)

*Wait, I've just worked out what is happening here; it's a cunningly inverted metatextual reference to the canon scene where Christine drags Raoul off to the roof by force because she's terrified that the Phantom will kill her... Oh. No, it's not. It's just badfic :-(*

Meanwhile (back at the ranch)

Raoul and Christine make it to the roof (in a sudden reeling tense change...). She yanks her hand from him grasp. (Him heap big Vicomte!) "Get away from me!" She screamed but she knew Raoul would not listen. "Christine you will marry me or.." He walks towards her, grabbing her neck and walking towards the edge of the roof. "Or I'll drop you!" (Raoul is holding her over the edge by her neck?) She screamed and screamed hoping someone would here her. (Here? There, there :-p) Erik made it to the roof and what he saw made his blood boil. (His blood made it to the roof...)

"LET GO OF THE GIRL!" Erik said with (Bill Brewer, Jan Stewer, Peter Gurney, Peter Davy, Dan'l Whiddon, Harry Hawke, Old Uncle Tom Cobley and all) in the shadows. Christine knew it was him. Her angel of music… Her love.

"I will never let Christine go. (Apparently Raoul knew that it was Erik "with in the shadows" too... he doesn't seem in the least surprised.) She is mine. And you sir will not stop me… But if you try and stop me I'll let her fall over the edge." Christine screamed when Raoul pushed her back a little. (I thought he was dragging her towards the edge when last seen?)

"No! Please don't hurt her." Erik said. It would kill Erik if he lost his one true love. "I will never love you Raoul." (SLASH ALERT :-D) Then she spit him his face. The hat angered him to the point where she was inches away from her death. (Oh no! The hat! How dared it?)

"Marry me Christine or die. Your choice!" He said with rage. Ready to drop her. (This is Raoul, right? The young man who begged Christine to let him die rather than enter into a forced marriage for his sake...?)

"Christine don't marry this monster! (Marry the innocent, persecuted, fluffy Phantom who would never dream of dropping a chandelier on you in a fit of insane jealousy, and skip through the meadows with little bunny-rabbits instead!) I can't live without you." Erik said with tears in his eyes as he came out of the shadows. Christine saw and tears fell from her eyes. Raoul saw the look in Christine eyes and saw that she loved this mask killer. (If he has to kill a thousand masks...)

"What will it be Christine? Marry me are I'll drop you." (Arrrr, me hearties.) She looked at Raoul then Erik. More tears fell from her eyes. "I'm sorry Angel. I tried so hard." She said crying (with tears falling from her eyes...) "Oh Christine. You have nothing to be sorry about. I love you my Christine." "How about this I'll give you 48 hours to decide. And I you say no…" Raoul let her go by throwing her across the roof. (Winds up, swings the lady round his head, a couple of hops... let go!) Walking towards Erik. "I'll kill your angel that you love so much." Then Raoul left. Christine ran to Erik hugging her. (SLASH ALERT :-D) "Oh Erik what am I to do."

"You have to marry him Christine."

"What! No I-." Erik stopped her. "I have a plan. You will say yes to the boy and I'll kidnap you." Christine looked confused (as well she might). "I'll use Don Juan Triumphant. I will present it to the managers at the masquerade ball." Erik helped Christine up, leading her to the door. "But that's not for another few weeks." He shook his head in agreement with her. (After which she was presumably even more confused.) "Come let's go see Madame Giry." Then they both left. As they make their way to Madame Giry Erik is holding Christine and he's loving every moment of it. (Whoah yeah! Lovin' it!) He could think of losing Christine. (Quite sanguine about it, really.) The only girl in the world who loves him. Him thinking of it ripped his heart in half. By the time they get to Giry's office she walks up to Erik and Christine. "Their (bank-managers) you are I have been looking all over for you Christine…. What's wrong?" She leads them into her office. They sit and Erik says "Christine has to Marry Raoul." He said with great disappointment. (Tense whiplash, random Important Capitals, he says, he says -- urk…)

"What! Why?" She said with otter shock. (Throw that lady a fish!)

"He threatened mine and Christine's life. But don't worry I have a plan." Erik said looking at Antoinette. She almost looked confused. (Only 'almost'...? That's impressive when faced with this stuff :-p)

"Okay but I have a bad feeling about this." She said

In Erik's lair

I have a bad feeling about this too...

Christine and Erik sat on the steps leading to his organ "I love you Erik." Christine said cuddling his chest. (She wrapped her arms around its bronze-strapped sides and caressed the lid lovingly.)

"I love you too" (she added in the direction of the chest) she leans in to kiss him. She continuously kissing Erik. She felt this felling below her belly (chop! chop! Timber!) she got on his lap still kissing him.

"Christine are you sure we should be doing this? (Felling without a permit is strictly illegal, you know.)"

"Yes I want to. I love you Erik."

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Some content my not be suitable (My, my...) for ages 18 and under. If you do not not to read this part skip it…. Last chance. (Actually, I don't not not -- does that make a triple negative?)

You have been warned. (You know, if I bothered to report this uninspiring attempt to insert an M-rated scene into a story listed as T-rated, I could get your entire story deleted off the site. If you'd actually managed to make it steamy enough to embarrass anybody over the age of twelve...)

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Erik carried Christine to his bed and laying her down on the bed he slowly started to undress her. She moaned with enjoyment, wanting more Christine started to undress Erik. Erik unbutton her dress and threw it across the room. (Has he any idea how big these things are to throw?) Then Christine reached to take him jacket off and she too threw it across the room landing on her dress on the floor. (Lucky that she had the padding to land on, really :-p) She unbuttoned his vest and took his shirt off and threw it with the other clothes on the floor. Erik saw that Christine had a corset on so he undid each lace. (He unthreaded the lace through each hole? One by one? Hasn't this man ever heard of simply loosening and unhooking the busk?) He finally got the corset he threw it (what is this obsession these two have with launching clothes into the air?) and saw how beautiful Christine was. She was so beautiful with her chocolate curls covering her breast. (Sounds like some kind of dessert :-p Also, what about the other breast -- is that one lying around naked or something?)

"Oh Christine you're so beautiful (Three 'beautifuls' in the space of as many sentences? I'm guessing that this little scene must represent the conception of Gustave, then :-p)" Erik said caressing her body. She moaned as he reached to take her panties off. "Christine are you sure about this. We do not have to if you do not want to." He said but hoping she wouldn't say no.

"Erik please take me. I can't bare this tournament any longer." (Naked jousting strictly ruled out, then -- what a pity...) She moaned. So with out any hesitation Erik took his pants off only left in his underwear (I'm not sure I want to know just what was left in his underwear...). He looked at her and realized that he truly loves Christine.

"Christine I love you." And with that he took the remaining clothes he had on left (only the right-hand side of his body remained clothed) and threw them on the floor. (What with Raoul doing a shot-put impression with Christine on the roof, I'm started to wonder if this author has some kind of throwing fetish :-D) Christine looked down and saw Erik was naked. She looked worried. "Christine don't worry. I'll try to make this painless as possible." She nodded and Erik position himself on top of Christine and with one thrust he was inside Christine. His Christine. He saw the look on Christine face (-- how dared he call her 'his Christine'?) "Christine my love are you okay." He said thrusting inside her. Her eyes widen but she felt this feeling inside that she liked. But it was more than like she kinda loved having Erik inside her.

"No Erik don't stop." She said wanting more. Erik saw that she wanted more. She was scratched his back. Erik kept moving inside Christine.I would say that this stuff wanks itself, except that under the circumstances that would be a really unfortunate expression to use... :-p

"Erik. Oh god Erik." She screamed in pleasure Erik moved in and out. Christine moaned with such pleasure.

"Christine. Oh god Christine you feel so good." Erik said between breathes. Christine running her nails against his back. Erik knew he was close but he didn't want to come until Christine did. He tried really hard. Coming in and out of his Christine. (That sounds messy...)

"Oh god Erik I'm close. Oh god." She said as Erik started to kiss her all over. (Under those circumstances? What is he, some kind of contortionist?)

"Erik!" She screamed letting everything go. Erik did the same letting everything go. (And, no doubt, throwing it on the floor...)

Sorry chapter 8 is late. So what didn't you think. (Since you put it that way, old girl, I didn't think much of it!) I know the sexual content is crap but it's something. I'll try and make it better. (Please, no.) What's going to happen next? Will Erik get to save his Christine from Raoul? Find out in the next chapter. Only 6 chapters left.

Actually, the next chapter merely consists of more thrusting and coming, after which they 'laid' on the bed four times; fertilised eggs, presumably, after all that effort? ;-P

And two of the subsequent chapters consist merely of short author's notes: maybe I ought to report it, because she really is begging to have the story wiped! But no, that would be too vengeful...

The scary thing is that she is busy excusing herself for not letting Erik kill Evil Rapist Murderer Raoul by promising that the latter is going to be required for a major role in the much-awaited sequel... The sequel? Aarrgghh! Bring me the eye-bleach!