Revan sketch 1-Color by Cindrollic on DeviantArt (original) (raw)

i would agree that this is a very good piece, though there's a few anatomical issues... one more troubling than the first.

1. Her breasts are rather large... I mean, I don't know if you were going for that? Or if it was some sort of fluke, but generally women of that body stature (unless they have received some manner of augmentation) don't have breasts that size (especially active women, such as someone who would excercise in order to be able to acrobatically wield two bladed weapons, although those are light sabers I'd go so far s to call it the same basic situation)

2. the front of her pelvis ends far too low, this one is a bit more of a problem than a quirk. That strictly NEVER happens as long as there isn't a birth defect involved. The musculature indicates that her glutes are at one point, at which the base of the pelvis (especially on a fit woman) would be much higher toward the torso at that angle, i'd be willing to do a quick sketch of it and scan it up if you're really interested in what i mean by that.

3. Yes, i know i said there were only two, but i looked back and found a third XP this is also, a minor issue. Although anatomically it is a major one, it is rather off to the side, and more toward the edge of the image, which is generally the artist's lazy point (it's the place where it is more acceptable to not render/correct things as well, because it might draw focus from the main part). Her right knee, is nonexistant? Her left leg is perfect, but her right leg from the base of the femur is rather off... her calf muscle seems flat, and the way her leg is bent (if you can see the shapeliness of the butt, the leg is on its side for your view, the WHOLE thing. It may twist a little at the base, but your leg cannot twist at the knee appart from the very base part around the ankle, and even there, it cannot twist very much. Her knee would be more defined, and her calf muscle would be sticking out toward the back, the shin muscles are a bit more flat, but are still somewhat round). Mind you this is constructive criticism, I'm not just pointing out your flaws to say you did a bad job. Just to make this seem nicer, i'll write some of your strengths in as well ^.^

1. You really captured her mood VERY well, aggressive, but not exactly dark, and that really plays for the OTHER side of revan (the side that fan-artists of KOTOR generally ignore) and i definitely enjoy your individualism and your originality and creativity. The musculature for the most part is quite good, and although her bust is a bit large, it's realistic for the size (in other words, she doesnt have those impossibly perky "balloon tits," while they do have somewhat unrealistic mass, they have realistic gravitational feel) and you really captured a great stylized look on the piece as well. Yes, stylized means cartoony, but that's not exactly bad! Stylized images are made that way because it looks cooler! haha, anyway, you did a good job, and this wasn't an attack, I just know what it's like being an artist when NOBODY TELLS YOU HOW TO IMPROVE, and you're stuck at the same point in your career and can't advance because you can't figure out what's wrong! You can usually see it, but you don't know what it is. Anyway, sorry for the rant. If you bothered to read the whole thing, I congratulate you on your perseverance and patience!