Chapter 3: Page 14 by FennecSilvestre on DeviantArt (original) (raw)

One of the most adequate pages for re-edition due to the number of elements that never managed to convince me. Many may not know, but Sweet Lullaby was originally intended to be a "mute" comic in which the narrator would only serve as some kind of support...but at least in my opinion, that ended up being more of a nuisance than anything else, and this page was one of the best examples of it. Those dialogues should have always been Flaky's thoughts, more like a dynamic between the character and the reader, without having to resort to a narrator holding your hand at all times.

I have read a lot of things since the first edition and I am very happy that now I have enough confidence to contribute with my own ideas, even if they are just a few, at least during these first 4 chapters. Outside of writing, I also feel much better with the new look of the page, with more vivid colors and more obvious attitudes, specially in the last 3 pannels, which had quite a lot of anatomy and perspective errors. It's not perfect, but to do it properly, then that would have to be a remake in its entirety Oh well, even if I can see where it fails, at least I feel a lot more satisfied now.