A Demon That Hunts Her Kind by kakashisgirlfighter on DeviantArt (original) (raw)

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact

This is a combined critique between =Zorokra and *DrawerElma

We are going to be as fair as we can, please note anything that we say is in the interest of you developing as an artist and not to hurt your feelings.

Head

The most impacting thing here is the anatomy, we’re sorry to say it but it looks wrong, but rather than just tell you it’s wrong, we’ll say why it’s wrong. We are going to start with the head and the shape of it. First it looks a little small and deformed compared to the rest of the body. The left eye is bigger than the right eye and the mouth is crooked. If this was your intention then it doesn't seem to have the right effect, making it look incorrect rather than what you intended it to be. The eyes have a highlight that is central, which makes its look like the white highlight is the pupil. I have made this mistake myself (Zorokra) and it is very easy to do [link] but when highlights are done properly they will make your drawings more accurate. You did draw the anime eyes in a really good style, and I quite like that.

Torso

Next up is the torso. The right arm looks like it has been attached onto the side of the torso awkwardly, and both shoulders don't seem to be equal, making it look stiff and rather uncomfortable. We don't mean to offend you, but it appears as if the breasts are not even attached to her body. There are just some curved lines where they are meant to be, and there is no indication of where they start or end. The fold in the middle of the clothes that just goes straight over the breast is wrong, in real life it would curve with the shape of the body, and this would give more volume and depth. More depth and shadowing are also needed to bring out the volume of the drawing, because it’s not as flat as it appears to be. The folds in the clothes could also be improved, most of them are randomly drawn and don't fit the flow of the clothes, it seems too stiff again and more like armor than clothes... This could be improved by adding folds around the belly area to give it a more natural free feel. Add more folds and substance to the arm. Also it seems like the material has just dissipated and no longer exists, with more folds it would look a lot better and not as solid. The neck is a tad too wide and short. We like the details you put into the character like the necklace and the weapon, but it could use something even more unique then just that.

Hands/arms

The arms don't seem to give us the impression that they have muscle. The arm that has its skin exposed doesn't seem to join the elbow correctly. It looks like it can't bend properly, and is rather uncomfortable. The hand on the left side looks more like it is just placed on the leg, it doesn't look connected to the arm, and the sleeve of the shirt should be overlapping the hand and thigh if it is in front of her like her hand. Also she looks like she is gripping the blade of the weapon and not the grip itself. It also looks as if she is going to stab herself in the thigh, because of the placement of the weapon.

Fingers

On the left hand there is an extra finger above the middle finger, it would look more accurate if this was removed, for from the side you cannot see all the 5 fingers. The fingers look shorter on the left side than they do on the right. There seems to be an ingress where the hand-line contacts the sword-line and this does not look right, because it would look better if there was shape to it.

Waist

The first thing we notice about this is that the size of the thigh, the left thigh is almost the same size as the waist. The waist is too small compared to the upper body (torso). A female has much wider hips than a male, and doesn't have quite as wide/large shoulders. There should be more folds (again) on the pants. There is movement in this drawing, but it looks too stiff due to the lack of details and shadowing. The pants also seem to be missing a zipper or buttons to close the pants with. What is she holding her leg up on? Or is it just standing up by itself, is she perhaps holding her leg up with her hand? Either way, it doesn't look correct because we can't see what is going on.

Other

(Zorokra) Overall I think it isn't a terrible drawing but does need a lot more work put into it. It could be a really good picture if you corrected all these flaws with the anatomy and give the picture something about it, a mood, an emotion, something that captivates the imagination. You obviously love to draw and put more time into practicing to get these things right, then you will see a dramatic improvement in your work. I hope you continue drawing and keep finding it most importantly fun.

(DrawerElma) Even though our critique may seem harsh, please do not take it the wrong way. Constructive criticism helps people develop and draw better. I used to think that my art was "perfect" before I actually took a hard look at it and studied what I was drawing, rather than just drawing it out of my head. Studying will improve your art unarguably. I also recommend watching ALL SORTS of art, not only digital/traditional art, but also literature, cosplays, and much much more. That is art too, and if you have a bigger view on "what is art" you may get many new ideas and a more unique style. Like the saying "brighten your views" open your eyes to new sorts and different sorts of art. That alone helps a lot.

General

There is nothing unique about this drawing, which can attract people to look at your work more. It seems like it is missing something, a meaning perhaps. The background although better than plain white, just looks like it is there to fill the void.

Disclaimer

Please do not feel like we're trying to offend you in any way shape or form. We are simply artists like you trying to help one another. And all our opinions are based on what we KNOW to be true and accurate, if you can prove us wrong, you are more than welcome to do so. If there are any details (something specific) that we NEED to know about the artwork, contact us. Sincerely from 2 artists to another, we hope we helped, and hope you continue to improve in your art.