Vi by KodaJolly on DeviantArt (original) (raw)

Hi!
I found this piece at a group were critics are needed and so I decided to drop by and share a few tips
The general idea is pretty cool. I would advice you to try a stronger set of shades, as I can tell, you get the general idea of shading so applying darker shades would make your coloring look better by adding some depth sense. On traditional art, it may sound like a hard task but that's far from truth, let's say you're shading the top cloth (red neck and such), I'd use orange and maybe some yellow to the areas where light strikes the fabric and some brown, blue and purple for the dark shades. When black clothes are used, gray, white, blue and red are your best allies. As for the skin and hair, which share pinkish hues, I'd advice orange and red and even blue

Blending mechanical limbs with organical body is never easy. On this topic, I'd say you work a little more on the left glove (drawing's left). From the right one, I can tell the mechanical arm/forearm goes along with the girl's and she's stretching her arm towards the viewer, so maybe the forearm should be bent and a little less visible. Of course, that depends on the organical arm's position, but judging from the girl's fingers and the way they are shown, I assumed the position and thought of my previous comment

Still on the anatomical section, I feel the head is a little too big. Googles are usually tightened around the skull and so you can tell the skull's size. Also, ears often lie on a parallel line to the skull so according to the pose, it should be smaller.

But of course this is only an opinion. Either way, keep on practicing!