12 Hour Film by stumpy32 on DeviantArt (original) (raw)

Here is your requested critique from ~
I'm not very knowledgeable with animation, so I'm sorry if my critique is not useful =/

Negatives/Improvements
> With some of the objects, it was a little difficult to tell what they were, such as the blue things infront of the clown. Perhaps slightly more detail on the background and objects would help the viewer be able to tell more of what they are.
> Being able to see the background through the clown was a little distracting for me, though I don't know if in 12 hrs you would have time to change this because of having to do more animation or something.
> There was a little too much white in there for me. This is just a personal opinion - the animation stood out brilliantly against the white but I think a little more colour would have looked good, especially on the clown himself.

Positives
> I love the sketchy sort of feel to this because it really makes it more personal and shows your own style. I also love the cartoony style that the animation was done in and the drawing of the clown himself.
> The animation itself was really smooth and I love the range of poses and expressions you used, such as when the clown was blowing up the balloon and when he got hit on the side of the head. These expressions really give the clown more personality.
> I think that to have done this in 12 hours only is a fantastic achievement. The character and animation is well thought out, smooth and fun. It could be shown to any age-group too, and is easily enjoyed.

This is a brilliant piece~ Excellent job!